Ever since lockdown started, I have been BORED. So when our online classes started, I was happy, because I finally had something to do! Mr Wikaira gave us a task to write a recount of our weekend.
Hi Ibraham, Hahaha, great story. To read this made me happy. I do have one question, how or what was your sister doing to make this annoying/weird noise.
This is a very well written recount. I really enjoyed reading it. I like how you incorporated humour into your recount. You have used good punctuation and grammar. Well done!
I agree with what Marleen, Petula and Mrs Mohini said. It was humorous and engaging. You put a lot of personal voice and I really liked you used interesting vocabulary - steaming and repeatedly.
Can you reread your story? I wonder if you can find another place to put a capital letter or remove an exclamation mark.
Hi Ibraham,
ReplyDeleteHahaha, great story. To read this made me happy. I do have one question, how or what was your sister doing to make this annoying/weird noise.
Hey Ibrahim
ReplyDeleteLove the humour in your recount. Some good descriptive words in there too.. I think I’m one of those people that remembered exercising was a thing!
Do you think you could think of another title? One that would grab the attention of your reader?
Happy blogging!
Kia ora Ibrahim,
ReplyDeleteThis is a very well written recount. I really enjoyed reading it. I like how you incorporated humour into your recount. You have used good punctuation and grammar. Well done!
Looking forward to your next blog post!
Kia ora Ibrahim,
ReplyDeleteI agree with what Marleen, Petula and Mrs Mohini said. It was humorous and engaging. You put a lot of personal voice and I really liked you used interesting vocabulary - steaming and repeatedly.
Can you reread your story? I wonder if you can find another place to put a capital letter or remove an exclamation mark.
Looking forward to future blog posts,
Miss Laxa
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ReplyDeleteguten tag Ibrahim
ReplyDeleteI agree with what Ms Laxa said
But did the day just end with you getting annoyed with your sister or was there nothing interesting?